Help Me Pick a Blurb for My Story! (Suzanne Forster)

The good news is I finally have a new book coming out! The bad news is I have two different blurbs and can’t figure out which one to use. I’ve asked friends, family and fellow writers, but so far, it’s a split decision. I was getting ready to toss a coin when a bright idea hit me. Suzanne, take your dilemma straight to the people.

THE PRIVATE CONCIERGE is officially a November ’08 release from Mira Books, but could show up on the shelves as early as the last week of October. Meanwhile, here’s a quick look at the story. Lane Chandler runs a private concierge service for high-profile clients. She’s risked everything to escape her past and make her business a success, but now her clients are being targeted by career-wrecking scandals, and worse, murder. Rick Bayless is the one man from her past Lane would prefer never to see again. He’s the former cop who put her in juvenile hall at fifteen—and Lane’s very own private scandal.

That’s a thumbnail of the story. The two blurbs are below, and I’d love to know which one you think I should use in my promotional efforts for THE PRIVATE CONCIERGE. If you’d leave a comment on this blog, telling me which you one prefer, I’d be ever so appreciative. And just for fun, I’m also running a contest with some very cool prizes on my web site. One grand prize winner and three runners up will be selected at random from those who voted for the winning blurb. If you’d like to enter, click on the link or cut and paste it into your browser: www.suzanneforster.com. All contest details can be found on the web site.

BLURB #1:

THERE’S NOTHING PRIVATE ABOUT MURDER…

L.A.’s rich and powerful rely on Lane Chandler’s company, The Private Concierge, to anticipate their every whim…and to guarantee unparalleled discretion. But then one of Lane’s celebrity patrons is found murdered in the most undignified manner imaginable. In rapid succession, three other prominent clients become embroiled in separate scandals, thanks to what looks like a security breach of TPC’s communication systems.

As word gets out, clients drop Lane like last week’s gossip. She’s bent on keeping TPC’s name out of the papers, but when former LAPD vice cop Rick Bayless starts nosing around, she has much more to worry about than bad PR. Rick knows about Lane’s shadowy past, and he’s certain she’s hiding new secrets. With no other options, Lane must face a dangerous conspirator who knows more about her every move than she does.

BLURB #2:

She was Lucy Cox, a runaway who was forced into the oldest profession at a tender age. He was the vice cop who posed as a customer, and put her in juvenile hall. He’s been haunted by her ever since. And she will never forget the humiliation of handcuffs, police cars and jail cells. Or the man who changed the course of her life.

Today she is Lane Chandler, a new woman and legitimate business tycoon. Her private concierge service is prized by high-profile clients across the country. Today he is a ruined man. And destiny is about to put them on another collision course.

His best friend, an all-star pitcher, dies mysteriously and scandalously, and three other prominent personalities are embroiled in scandals that ruin their careers and their lives. The police dismiss the incidents as unrelated. But he sees what the police cannot. The one thing that links them is her … The Private Concierge

So, there you have them. If you’d like to comment on why you prefer one over the other that would be great. The more feedback the better. If not, just let me know your pick. The blurb that gets the most votes will be featured on my web site and in my various promotional projects. And who knows, it might even show up on the back of the book!

Thank you and good luck!!

Suz